tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post7659188777668404055..comments2024-03-27T09:33:00.314+00:00Comments on In Search of Perdition: The Prediction - the end of the world as we know it?Phil Slomanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comBlogger68125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-35366831574956070752012-12-28T19:49:09.682+00:002012-12-28T19:49:09.682+00:00Oh dear, oh dear, oh dear. I lost track of the day...Oh dear, oh dear, oh dear. I lost track of the days with the yuletide festivities and thought today was Thursday not yesterday! Too much egg nog methinks.<br /><br />Doors are shut now, definitely shut. Judging to be done and new words to be presented. Oh do forgive this slightly addled judge this once.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-83780132256671263372012-12-28T17:21:51.420+00:002012-12-28T17:21:51.420+00:00superb poem with intense and fascinating imagery. ...superb poem with intense and fascinating imagery. Something to think about.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-25317083547540289182012-12-28T09:13:40.244+00:002012-12-28T09:13:40.244+00:00I love the imagery your words conjure up about the...I love the imagery your words conjure up about the child-bride and her transformation. What is it she becomes I wonder, and very interesting about the Master "whom every demon, angel, shade" obey. This Master rules over both the dark and the light.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-41200251531745571662012-12-28T09:08:25.084+00:002012-12-28T09:08:25.084+00:00There's a dark beauty to this bleak future, an...There's a dark beauty to this bleak future, and I love how you closed it with the small reminder of hope/life. Though perhaps we would not continue, life would go on as it always does.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-59593756584377918622012-12-28T09:03:33.838+00:002012-12-28T09:03:33.838+00:00Lovely! Short and yet you've captured a very i...Lovely! Short and yet you've captured a very interesting story here. I'm also very curious why the ronin was at the orphanage. Was he perhaps once an inhabitant of this place?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-34439516899332875742012-12-27T11:41:56.711+00:002012-12-27T11:41:56.711+00:00An excellent bit of poetry with a mystical tale la...An excellent bit of poetry with a mystical tale laid out before us. Love the way that you entice me to go back and read this again and again to glean further bits of the mythos within. So much for the reader to feast on here.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-78003741950788102342012-12-27T11:37:00.543+00:002012-12-27T11:37:00.543+00:00And our first limerick here under my watch of The ...And our first limerick here under my watch of The Prediction. Vengeful spirits come to deal death from the afterlife in a tale which has so much going on in it. Why was the orphanage shut down, was it because of our vengeful onryō, what was the ronin doing there and was he an innocent victim or not? Love it Zoe!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-62229102783125041932012-12-27T11:33:19.570+00:002012-12-27T11:33:19.570+00:00Beautiful descriptions as always and our queen rem...Beautiful descriptions as always and our queen reminds me of the Queen of Hearts from Alice in Wonderland - a nasty piece of work if ever there was one and one you have rivalled here.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-91622654145304806942012-12-24T17:30:00.175+00:002012-12-24T17:30:00.175+00:00Felt like a fantasy piece to start with John which...Felt like a fantasy piece to start with John which you so deftly mixed with dystopian science fiction halfway through. What use is a king without subjects and here he waits for death having become overly familiar with our skull-faced assassin in the previous years. A chilling view of the future told with poetic panache.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-77977544494853230882012-12-24T17:25:23.639+00:002012-12-24T17:25:23.639+00:00Sandra - never worry about the lack of horror. I t...Sandra - never worry about the lack of horror. I throw up the three genres as a guide but we have had a variety of tales in other styles/genres here; not sure I have the credentials to judge romance though if anyone throws one of those in! Sure I speak for everyone that we just want good stories to read and this definitely falls into that category. Keep them coming!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-17416272595479407702012-12-24T17:21:45.250+00:002012-12-24T17:21:45.250+00:00Crossing my legs as I read this one Antonia!Crossing my legs as I read this one Antonia!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-1320344223826517702012-12-24T17:19:03.239+00:002012-12-24T17:19:03.239+00:00Hmmmm, intrigued to see where this will go. Will o...Hmmmm, intrigued to see where this will go. Will our cad from last week survive? From the previous tale I hope he meets some justice along the way.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-88686187119724038012012-12-23T13:19:04.582+00:002012-12-23T13:19:04.582+00:00That final line sends us back to re-read, and re-e...That final line sends us back to re-read, and re-experience, ever more, the matter-of-factness of the horror of it.Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-77176090929285005152012-12-23T13:15:36.162+00:002012-12-23T13:15:36.162+00:00There's an element of 'if you gotta go ......There's an element of 'if you gotta go ...' but bleak indeed, and beautifully decribed.Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-67369509507936456072012-12-23T13:13:33.189+00:002012-12-23T13:13:33.189+00:00Yes, nice ...Yes, nice ...Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-70937470634269165622012-12-23T10:33:59.234+00:002012-12-23T10:33:59.234+00:00I love the way you continually are able to weave a...I love the way you continually are able to weave a sprinkling of humour throughout these pieces Antonia week after week. And then this week you bring us to melancholy, evoking a sympathy from me which I would never have thought to have for a zombie. Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-12100690784796684572012-12-23T10:31:16.689+00:002012-12-23T10:31:16.689+00:00Agree - that line about not catching him is great....Agree - that line about not catching him is great. Subtle piece of writing to capture the essence of their fractured relationship. Now I feel for Colleen as she has to follow that!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-83847768090932299192012-12-23T09:14:47.571+00:002012-12-23T09:14:47.571+00:00A more mystical version of Britain's Got Talen...A more mystical version of Britain's Got Talent but I suspect the drudgery that those who are unsuccessful return to may not be so pleasant. <br /><br />A nice tale Matt which brings a sense of hope to many in what feels a desolate world for the poor.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-17568894127595774902012-12-23T07:48:14.081+00:002012-12-23T07:48:14.081+00:00What is it about these words that's driving us...What is it about these words that's driving us to poetry? =)<br /><br />This is great, RR. Works well as a poem, and in the story it tells, the visions it conjures up. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-82009429812179467012012-12-23T07:45:36.692+00:002012-12-23T07:45:36.692+00:00The one green shoot, the hope at the bottom of the...The one green shoot, the hope at the bottom of the jar. A bleak vision, fortunately we're a good few millennia away from being swallowed by the sun! *phew*<br /><br />Might buy up on sunscreen just in case though... ;DJohn Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-54335047379873429642012-12-23T07:41:31.837+00:002012-12-23T07:41:31.837+00:00Very cool. Good work, Zoe. =)Very cool. Good work, Zoe. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-31609539946134321142012-12-23T07:40:21.273+00:002012-12-23T07:40:21.273+00:00Love the feel of motion in the action, and the sen...Love the feel of motion in the action, and the sense of the queen's nature built through details... her rolling wild, blackened eyes, the spittle, and of course, the fantastic punchline. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-66380085677575117022012-12-22T21:20:09.619+00:002012-12-22T21:20:09.619+00:00Pageant
Each year at Yule they gather ‘round,
orp...<b>Pageant</b><br /><br />Each year at Yule they gather ‘round,<br />orphan girls to try the crown. <br />Hands extend to see which one<br />will take the power, come undone,<br />be remade, another thing,<br />twisted body lengthening<br />grown large and full, ripe until<br />she’s fit to be the perfect tool,<br />a mate unto the Master made<br />whom every demon, angel, shade<br />shall fall before, fear, obey.<br /><br />To the world the Chosen One<br />gives the morning and the sun –<br />but not the son, oh no, not He,<br />for ever shall she sterile be,<br />this the bargain and the price,<br />the child-bride, our sacrifice<br />for fragile peace.<br />RR Kovarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05165990070862127913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-44387164500890957382012-12-22T17:51:36.951+00:002012-12-22T17:51:36.951+00:00definitely part of a greater whole! more please.definitely part of a greater whole! more please.Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-26964703513588203962012-12-22T17:50:16.900+00:002012-12-22T17:50:16.900+00:00such precise writing conjuring such precise images...such precise writing conjuring such precise images!Antonia Woodvillehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12594229396805493611noreply@blogger.com