tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post5805881193957498208..comments2024-03-27T09:33:00.314+00:00Comments on In Search of Perdition: The Prediction - changing timesPhil Slomanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comBlogger99125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-48905451218792715582012-09-29T12:26:19.320+01:002012-09-29T12:26:19.320+01:00Sunshine thoughts all,
Sandra...brings back memor...Sunshine thoughts all,<br /><br />Sandra...brings back memories from my own two babies, ick. Well done I honestly felt sick for her.<br /><br />John...I love how your oubliette has evolved, questioning whether we carry our prisons with us Yay<br /><br />Muckie...heartbreaking, touching words really sad, the way you change from tender to devastated is lovely<br /><br />Phil...this made me wonder what kind of luck he needed, the chaos is pitch perfect as you add that crazy theme song great great<br /><br />Shaun...yay always good to read you. Loved this story in a creepy Richard Laymon, Woods Are Dark kinda a way excellent.<br /><br />Ravenways...the story felt nostalgic and bittersweet despite the action, to imagine them as children is powerful use of emotion<br /><br />Hope I did not skip anyone. If I did I am sorry. See you next week.<br />Marietta Mileshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11168584640510218423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-42865207337082177642012-09-28T12:15:13.138+01:002012-09-28T12:15:13.138+01:00Thank you Reba! xxThank you Reba! xxLily Childshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15861288507716873813noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-13485227630534455582012-09-28T04:25:22.920+01:002012-09-28T04:25:22.920+01:00The quiet horror of this piece leaves one a little...The quiet horror of this piece leaves one a little breathless. I especially appreciated the symbolism here... faith and betrayal... in the gritty reality of human failings.<br /><br />Very well done, Colleen!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13430872985988041256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-13515568681934915762012-09-28T04:19:55.062+01:002012-09-28T04:19:55.062+01:00Sharp and nasty... and that bit of humour at the e...Sharp and nasty... and that bit of humour at the end?<br /><br />Very clever, Shaun! The imagery is both horrific and humourous... I like this one!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13430872985988041256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-6747573622089181952012-09-28T04:16:02.418+01:002012-09-28T04:16:02.418+01:00Thank you, Shaun and Phil! I hope I didn't pu...Thank you, Shaun and Phil! I hope I didn't put anyone off their appetites. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13430872985988041256noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-14614575419663626502012-09-27T22:01:12.810+01:002012-09-27T22:01:12.810+01:00Ok, that's it. I've finished commenting so...Ok, that's it. I've finished commenting so that's the party over for this week. Hope that you've enjoyed it as much as me this week. Some amazing stories and my head aches just thinking about how I am going to choose between them (or maybe that's just the campari and soda!!).<br /><br />Stay awhile and read the tales, comment if you will, but no more entries for now. New words will spill forth shortly.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-61939783425618501912012-09-27T21:58:39.009+01:002012-09-27T21:58:39.009+01:00Bribes? I'm allowed to take bribes. Oh crap, w...Bribes? I'm allowed to take bribes. Oh crap, why did no-one tell me that before, I could have made a fortune!!!<br /><br />Colleen - clever to use the image of Peter Rabbit to show us innocence lost for Seth and Nate. I woul say I wonder where you are going to take us next with this but I suspect you don't know until your dance partner waltzes you to the next scene. Keep them coming!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-18052831544942746092012-09-27T21:53:21.637+01:002012-09-27T21:53:21.637+01:00Shaun, fantastic to see you back and hope that lif...Shaun, fantastic to see you back and hope that life is treating you well. <br /><br />Great characters, great scene and a great bit of comedy to round it off with. Wonderful to see that you haven't lost the knack for this flashing malarky!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-77137738619786112202012-09-27T21:51:07.473+01:002012-09-27T21:51:07.473+01:00Thanks for the kind words and sorry for the seemin...Thanks for the kind words and sorry for the seeming cockiness! This was one of those pieces that needed to be rushed out to capture the madness required to cleave one's own foot away. Somehow I don't think Henry will end up with much luck after this!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-16434299831102817842012-09-27T21:46:48.466+01:002012-09-27T21:46:48.466+01:00Ok, you just went and ripped my heart right out of...Ok, you just went and ripped my heart right out of my chest. Such sorrow and heartache within this story. I imagine it must have been incredibly hard to write. The last line added to the raw emotion as the father let's his son have one more night of normality before tragedy tears his life apart.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-86098346731677933602012-09-27T21:44:04.745+01:002012-09-27T21:44:04.745+01:00Love the epic feel to this piece, almost a Moorcoc...Love the epic feel to this piece, almost a Moorcockian multiverse captured in 100 words.<br /><br />The tragic torment of remembering his past lives and what could have undoubtedly been without capture is a punishment I would not wish on anyone. Incredibly imaginative as always.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-53422092990565242042012-09-27T21:32:41.929+01:002012-09-27T21:32:41.929+01:00Sometimes you need a lull in the action and this w...Sometimes you need a lull in the action and this worked so well, taking us gently into the next act where I am sure more mayhem will ensue. I also love that you used the word coney. It always reminds me of when Sam and Frodo were trekking towards Mount Doom and Sam puts a pair on the pot for lunch.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-80239407644717262012-09-27T21:17:47.737+01:002012-09-27T21:17:47.737+01:00Hah, bet he claims on the insurance too (for both ...Hah, bet he claims on the insurance too (for both car and wife). The bleakness of the scene echoes the calmness of his actions. Well told and I could see you writing this as a longer piece (maybe stretch it across 2,000 words and submit to Thrillers, Killers n Chillers?).Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-24487582214581425102012-09-27T21:13:23.065+01:002012-09-27T21:13:23.065+01:00This has a feel of the old Twilight Zone shows. De...This has a feel of the old Twilight Zone shows. Despair leads to hope leads to despair again. Clever, clever piece which was told perfectly.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-67858764290252875872012-09-27T21:09:48.057+01:002012-09-27T21:09:48.057+01:00A stark despair permeates throughout this piece as...A stark despair permeates throughout this piece as we move closer towards the end of times. There is a sense of pre-apocalyse here, as if we are witnessing the autumn of existence before the bombs descend. Excellent.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-10553398833061015232012-09-27T20:56:49.313+01:002012-09-27T20:56:49.313+01:00When I read this the first words which popped into...When I read this the first words which popped into my head were visual and visceral but I see that everyone else has beaten me to it. All I can do, it seems, is echo the comments of everyone above and applaude the voraciousness of your imagination!Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-43244550780674549952012-09-27T20:26:52.512+01:002012-09-27T20:26:52.512+01:00I really loved the sense of getting drawn into the...I really loved the sense of getting drawn into the knowledge of the book through touch (reminds me a little of the relationship between my tome and I!!!). Really intrigued to know how that piece of tantalising knowledge plays out. Consistently strong writing each and every week.Phil Slomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12464183612097326811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-47794020025410617612012-09-27T19:01:20.167+01:002012-09-27T19:01:20.167+01:00Wow that was a gorefest and no mistake. It made me...Wow that was a gorefest and no mistake. It made me a bit queasy. Impressive.shaun Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03167565901368302269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-17463898446590390302012-09-27T18:57:57.588+01:002012-09-27T18:57:57.588+01:00This piece is beautifully written. Its a pleasure ...This piece is beautifully written. Its a pleasure to be here reading it.shaun Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03167565901368302269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-27829426239666659842012-09-27T18:07:04.733+01:002012-09-27T18:07:04.733+01:00LOL! I did not bribe Phil. When I wrote the prev...LOL! I did not bribe Phil. When I wrote the previous installment, I'd known I wanted the cookie jar to be something completely incongruous to the gritty feel of the rest of the story, and therefore somehow special. When this week's words were revealed, Peter Rabbit came to mind, and the rest is history. *grin* Thank you. I'm so glad you're enjoying our tiny tales.Colleen Foleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07412149737386384036noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-42624692790243159432012-09-27T17:05:24.765+01:002012-09-27T17:05:24.765+01:00Brilliant use of 'rabbit' - or did you sli...Brilliant use of 'rabbit' - or did you slip Phil a small bribe, <i>knowing</i> what the cookie jar was? <br />I am very much enjoying the interaction of Seth and Nate, and Jimmy. (Re-read the whole tale in its entirety yesterday, which further increases its impact)Sandra Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11788472031698175632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-26152113002165064962012-09-27T16:17:44.719+01:002012-09-27T16:17:44.719+01:00It's one influence (largely in the performance...It's one influence (largely in the performance of that particularly American style of masculinity), as are Rob Thurman's two series: Cal Leandros and the Korsak Brothers. There's also a touch of Ephraim & Manasseh, especially in the struggle to remain moral in a corrupt world. Their different ideas of what that means is part of their conflict. Unlike any of his potential counterparts, Seth is completely fine with being a "monster."RR Kovarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05165990070862127913noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-59095944403976333042012-09-27T16:11:53.908+01:002012-09-27T16:11:53.908+01:00Thanks Sandra, Iv'e had a busy few months. I r...Thanks Sandra, Iv'e had a busy few months. I really missed joining in with this. Maybe I will resurrect my serial some when soon. It's good to be back. ;-) Thanks Tony. Glad I made you both laugh. That was intentional. shaun Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03167565901368302269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-1109533902134990072012-09-27T16:02:10.321+01:002012-09-27T16:02:10.321+01:00Hello clarkythecruel
I wonder if anybody has ever...Hello clarkythecruel<br /><br />I wonder if anybody has ever done that. ;-) An unexpected turn of events. Very enjoyable read.shaun Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03167565901368302269noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2100355327187734441.post-82482773326185602682012-09-27T15:57:45.483+01:002012-09-27T15:57:45.483+01:00That's clever Anthony. I liked that very much....That's clever Anthony. I liked that very much.shaun Adamshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03167565901368302269noreply@blogger.com